Deer Mouse

He’s in the peripheral of your lantern’s light 

As his jump crests the undergrowth. 

His business, a serious endeavor 

Risking the watchful eyes of owls 

He’s intent upon finding your trail mix. 

You sit silent as he approaches,  

Trying to impart a feeling of friendship. 

You offer a nut and a seed. 

He takes one at a cautious distance 

Then darts back to the safety of tall grass. 

Your lantern’s propane hisses 

As you catch a glimpse of another of his small hops.  

He’s heading in the opposite direction towards tall trees 

With a bit of disappointment, perhaps, to his jump 

For you are packing up, securing all food 

And shutting off your lantern. 

A new silence. 

It’s darker than you thought darkness could ever get. 

But you know he’s still there as you fall asleep 

To the rustle of branches and the sly movement of the wind. 

The beginning of an alpine meadow on the north side of Mt. Adams

13 responses to “Deer Mouse”

  1. Danel Avatar
    Danel

    Lovely. I am there, watching and listening and hoping.

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Welcome!

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  2. danayoung500 Avatar
    danayoung500

    Wow! Great poem! Super descriptive and I love your writing style

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks so much Dana. I like your explanations about brainstorming for poetic ideas.

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      1. danayoung500 Avatar
        danayoung500

        Thank you so much also. I truly appreciate you reading my posts and I’m glad that you liked them. I read a couple of your poems and they are very well written, descriptive and I could visualize the poems perfectly. It’s like your poems are telling a story and taking the reader on a journey.

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  3. cazzycoop Avatar
    cazzycoop

    Wonderful

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  4. camilla wells paynter Avatar
    camilla wells paynter

    Just fantastic!! This brings to mind so many memories. In one, I am solo hiking Mt. Rainier’s Wonderland Trail. On my last night there, I hang my food bag from a bear pole. The next day, with a 20-mile hike out awaiting, I open my bag to discover that mousie has helped herself to my instant oatmeal. I shine my headlamp into the bag and there she is, drunk on gluttony, barely impressed by my light. She blinks and saunters away. The mouse turds prevent me from having breakfast. Later, some fellow hikers will gift me with peanut butter and honey tortillas. 🙂

    Another memory belongs to my guy and comes to me second hand. He spent a Thanksgiving at a wild lake in central Washington, a favorite catch and release fly-fishing destination. It was so cold (minus 4, Fahrenheit), that his glass of wine froze over. But he had a big fire in front of him and two propane heaters behind. Into his circle of fire came the local kangaroo rats. At first, they just hung out near the circle of warmth. But he was eating pistachios, and started sharing with them, so they came closer. Before the frigid night was over, the ground was dusted with icy snow and man and rat had formed a rare bond. ❤️

    Happy Hiking!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks Camilla! I like the word “bond” that you used. Funny, how we create different types of bonds when outside our normal parameters. Take care!

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      1. camilla wells paynter Avatar
        camilla wells paynter

        That’s so true! “Outside our normal parameters” is a place we should all try to be now and again. 🙂

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    2. Karin Avatar
      Karin

      I love those stories!

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      1. Ahzio Avatar
        Ahzio

        Thanks Karin!

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  5. Marie-Gaye Barton Avatar
    Marie-Gaye Barton

    Beautiful.

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks so much Marie-Gaye!!!

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