Mountain Stream

I recognize how she is carved 

From the liquid that shapes her  

Fashioned by countless tumbles & snow melts. 

It as if her hair is combed constantly  

For strands flow for miles, making a long tress. 

This hair of hers comes in an assortment of 

Twists, turns, reflections, textures 

Tiny waves, pressed, and curled. 

Her body, cool, cold at times 

Always in transit, flux, liminal. 

Her banks, like persistent suiters 

Follow her everywhere 

Only interrupted by the abrupt advances 

Of cliffs that dive in, but lose her 

While holding her at the same time 

For she is a trickster, more so than the ravens 

Dippers, and geese who tease. 

She will let me stumble  

Upon her rocks and boulders 

Like a babe learning to walk  

Like an adult…learning. 

You can see her inner personality 

In the form of falls 

Which roll over a series 

Of large stones and hills 

Or fall like a skydiver from 

A precipice, landing in a boom and roar. 

There have been times I’ve heard this 

Rumble, as if she shakes the ground 

With a message I must listen to. 

I am small then, in her presence 

My feet soft on her sides, my breath slow. 

But one turn around a cliff 

Into a secluded ravine 

And she becomes quiet 

As if she doesn’t even exist. 

It is within these areas of silence 

Where she tells me secrets 

Of everything and all, an endless epiphany 

And I realize I already know these things and have 

Known them, but, once I leave her whisper 

I will remember them only by what they felt like 

Recalling her faint rush of current 

An echo of the river she will become. 

Spring is the best time to visit a wild stream. You can see how alive they are.  

25 responses to “Mountain Stream”

  1. SantelizPonce Avatar
    SantelizPonce

    I read this as if it were about my Mom. What a beautiful poem!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Aww! Thanks so much!

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  2. Marie-Gaye Barton Avatar
    Marie-Gaye Barton

    Such a wonderful piece of writing. The personification of nature.

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Or, the naturing of humans. If you know what I mean. Thanks Marie-Gaye!

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      1. Marie-Gaye Barton Avatar
        Marie-Gaye Barton

        I do, yes!

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  3. PrEdIcTaBlY UNpreDicTaBLe Avatar
    PrEdIcTaBlY UNpreDicTaBLe

    Beautifully put together…

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Don’t thank me. Thank that creek in my photograph! Lol! Thanks!

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  4. isabellawolgoth Avatar
    isabellawolgoth

    I really think you nailed that archetype. Good work!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks Isabella!

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  5. Hunter Smolinski Avatar
    Hunter Smolinski

    This is incredible!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks so much Hunter!

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  6. camilla wells paynter Avatar
    camilla wells paynter

    This reminds me precisely of the blessed spring that provides us and our garden here with all of our water. She is deep in the woods, and there we leave her. We understand that her intact environment is why we have water. Many people here must have water delivered to them. People here log their properties. There’s lots of money in timber. But we don’t log, and we have water, when many others don’t. I appreciate your esteem for the stream. 😉 💖

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      True. Many don’t think beyond the tap or the supermarket when it comes to the essence that all life needs.

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  7. Lia Avatar
    Lia

    Such a deeply real and beautiful vision and craft in this poem… gorgeously materialized creative impulse… I read it and re-read it yesterday. It made life’s everyday activities feel infused with the sacred.

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Aww. Thanks Lia. It is sacred to me and us all I hope.

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  8. julielelder Avatar
    julielelder

    This is gorgeous and had me twisting and turning and tumbling along! ❤️

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks so much Julie!

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  9. Lori Pohlman Avatar
    Lori Pohlman

    So lovely!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks Lori!

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  10. Allykaymom’s Avatar
    Allykaymom’s

    Absolutely beautiful!

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks!

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  11. featherpentrack Avatar
    featherpentrack

    Beautiful.

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  12. poetlou Avatar
    poetlou

    you have taken this reader to another dimension

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    1. Ahzio Avatar
      Ahzio

      Thanks!

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  13. Vi Avatar
    Vi

    beautiful

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